雅思小作文评分：图书馆地图对比分析

Overall, your description of the two maps is clear and understandable. However, there are a few areas where improvements can be made.

Firstly, in the first map, you mentioned that there were four rooms in the library, but you did not specify the functions of each room. It would be helpful to provide more details about the specific functions of each room, such as the CD, video, and computer game room being used for storage, and the reading room being a space for reading.

Secondly, it would be beneficial to use more specific language to describe the changes in the second map. For example, instead of saying that the functions of the rooms have changed, you can mention that the children's room has been replaced by a lecture room, and the area for adult fiction books has been moved to the right near the information desk and self-service machines.

Additionally, the sentence 'The tables and chairs have all disappearing in the place' is unclear. It would be better to rephrase it to explain that the tables and chairs have been removed from the lobby.

Lastly, the sentence 'Book that are adult fiction books all are moved to the right, near the information desk and self-service machines' can be improved by using clearer language. You can mention that the adult fiction books have been relocated to the right side of the library, specifically near the information desk and self-service machines.

In terms of grammar and vocabulary, your writing is generally accurate. However, be careful with the use of singular and plural forms of words. For example, instead of saying 'children'book', it should be 'children's books'.

Overall, I would rate your writing a 6 out of 9. With some improvements in providing more specific details and clearer language, your score could be higher. Keep up the good work!