Professional Medical Paper Editing: Enhancing Clarity and Concision in Academic Writing

Analysis of SCG2 expression in both breast cancer (BRCA) and normal tissues was observed that SCG2 showed a significant up-regulation in the TCGA database| Original Sentence | Modified Sentence | Explanation | |-------------------------------------------------------------------|-----------------------------------------------------------------|--------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------| | Analysis of SCG2 in the BRCA and normal tissues revealed | Analysis of SCG2 expression in both breast cancer (BRCA) and normal tissues was observed | The modified sentence clarifies that the analysis was focused on SCG2 expression and specifies the type of tissues being studied (breast cancer and normal tissues). | | that SCG2 was significantly up-regulated in TCGA database | that SCG2 showed a significant up-regulation in the TCGA database | The modified sentence improves clarity by specifying that the up-regulation refers to SCG2 and not the analysis itself. The use of "showed" instead of "was" adds more concision and directness to the sentence. |