could you highlight the errors of my writingThere has been an increasing trend that more and more people are not familiar with their neighbours which leads to a poor sense of community There are a var
There are a few errors in your writing. Here are the corrected sentences:
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"There has been an increasing trend that more and more people are not familiar with their neighbours, which leads to a poor sense of community." Correction: There has been an increasing trend of people becoming unfamiliar with their neighbors, which leads to a poor sense of community.
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"With the rapid development of the Internet, people tend to spend time chatting and making friends using social media instead of meeting others in-person." Correction: With the rapid development of the internet, people tend to spend time chatting and making friends using social media instead of meeting others in person.
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"Secondly, it is not uncommon to see that a lot of people are moving all the time for various reasons such as marriage, new working places or studying in another city." Correction: Secondly, it is not uncommon to see many people moving all the time for various reasons such as marriage, new job opportunities, or studying in another city.
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"Finally, few community campaigns have been held and limited activity space has been constructed, providing a poor condition for encouraging social bonding." Correction: Finally, few community campaigns have been held and limited activity spaces have been constructed, providing poor conditions for encouraging social bonding.
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"Inactive community can certainly be lightened in several ways." Correction: An inactive community can certainly be revitalized in several ways.
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"I believe that the change must start with the managers of the community, who need to organise more engaging events, and encourage inhabitants to take part in, generating a vibrant atmosphere." Correction: I believe that the change must start with the managers of the community, who need to organize more engaging events and encourage inhabitants to take part, generating a vibrant atmosphere.
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"Also, the government should allocate part of the grants to the construction of entertaining areas for the community." Correction: Additionally, the government should allocate a portion of the grants to the construction of recreational areas for the community.
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"With the financial support from the authorities, the building projects would be guaranteed to proceed in a reliable way." Correction: With financial support from the authorities, the building projects would be guaranteed to proceed reliably.
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"At the same time, creating an online community on media platforms such as Wechat would be a good idea, where people would have access to the latest updates happening in the neighbourhood, share their opinions, and gradually get acquainted with each other." Correction: Additionally, creating an online community on media platforms such as WeChat would be a good idea, where people would have access to the latest updates happening in the neighborhood, share their opinions, and gradually get acquainted with one another.
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"In conclusion, neighbors would still be likely to be isolated until a joint effort of the government, community, and media are made to tackle this problem." Correction: In conclusion, neighbors are likely to remain isolated until a joint effort between the government, community, and media is made to tackle this problem
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