Improving Academic Writing: Analyzing the Weight Loss of Hydrophobically Modified Polymers

The hydrophobically modified polymer material experienced a relatively lower weight loss compared to that of PAM, demonstrating a decreasing trend with increasing alkyl chain length. This can be attributed to the following reasons:

1. The inclusion of hydrophobic monomers in the polymer hindered molecular chain mobility at high temperatures, consequently delaying decomposition to some degree.
2. The hydrophobic monomers slowed down the polymer decomposition process and raised the decomposition temperature.
3. However, the hydrophobic monomers did not substantially reduce the weight loss of the polymer material. This also accounts for the accelerated weight loss rate of the hydrophobically modified polymer at temperatures exceeding 420°C in the third stage.

| Original | Improved | Explanation ||--------------------------------------------------------------------|-----------------------------------------------------------------|------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------|| The weight loss of the hydrophobically modified polymer material was comparatively lower in comparison to that of PAM, exhibiting a declining trend as the alkyl chain length increased. | The hydrophobically modified polymer material experienced a relatively lower weight loss compared to that of PAM, demonstrating a decreasing trend with increasing alkyl chain length. | Revised the sentence to improve concision and clarity, specifying the polymer material and its weight loss trends. || This can be attributed to the following factors: | This can be attributed to the following reasons: | Changed 'factors' to 'reasons' for better precision. || 1. The incorporation of hydrophobic monomers into the polymer impeded molecular chain movement at elevated temperatures, thereby delaying decomposition to some extent. | 1. The inclusion of hydrophobic monomers in the polymer hindered molecular chain mobility at high temperatures, consequently delaying decomposition to some degree. | Clarified the sentence by providing more specific details about the hindrance of molecular chain movement and the delay in decomposition. || 2. The hydrophobic monomers decelerated the polymer decomposition process and elevated the decomposition temperature. | 2. The hydrophobic monomers slowed down the polymer decomposition process and raised the decomposition temperature. | Reworded the sentence to enhance clarity and conciseness, specifying the impact of the hydrophobic monomers on the decomposition process and temperature. || 3. Nevertheless, the hydrophobic monomers did not significantly diminish the weight loss of the polymer material. | 3. However, the hydrophobic monomers did not substantially reduce the weight loss of the polymer material. | Modified the sentence for clarity and precision, indicating that the hydrophobic monomers did not significantly reduce the weight loss of the polymer material. || This is also responsible for the accelerated rate of weight loss of the hydrophobically modified polymer at temperatures surpassing 420ﾰC during the third stage. | This also accounts for the accelerated weight loss rate of the hydrophobically modified polymer at temperatures exceeding 420ﾰC in the third stage. | Clarified that the accelerated weight loss rate of the hydrophobically modified polymer occurs at temperatures exceeding 420°C during the third stage. Replaced the incorrect symbol with the correct degree symbol. |